A poem for your enjoyment

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  1. Beer_Economicus

    Beer_Economicus Pooh-Bah (2,698) Apr 8, 2017 Ohio
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    I am not normally that guy, but...

    That was aweful. Really.
     
  2. TheIPAHunter

    TheIPAHunter Grand High Pooh-Bah (6,026) Aug 12, 2007 California
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    As an emcee, I feel qualified to jump in here. What type of stanza were you looking for? The traditional a-b a-b, or otherwise? I feel like I took my rhyming ability to the next level when I started to read the romantic period of poetry.

    I'm not saying it's great, but I respect the format. I get the sense that, perhaps, you might not be all that familiar with traditional poetry.

    Peace to the OP.

    "I establish parameters, through iambic pentameter."
     
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  3. Troutbeerbum

    Troutbeerbum Initiate (0) Dec 5, 2016 Maine

    I had heard a quote from that poem many years ago. For some reason it came to mind, and through the power of the internet I found it. Posted it purely because of the subject matter.
     
  4. Beer_Economicus

    Beer_Economicus Pooh-Bah (2,698) Apr 8, 2017 Ohio
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    It's not about form. I am a fan of Poetry and familiar with many poetry styles. The writing is just bad IMO.

    It's like when Twain or Shakespeare have a character write a poem in their work and it is pourposefully bad. That's how I see this.
     
  5. TheIPAHunter

    TheIPAHunter Grand High Pooh-Bah (6,026) Aug 12, 2007 California
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    I respect your opinion. Cheers.
     
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  6. PapaGoose03

    PapaGoose03 Grand High Pooh-Bah (6,057) May 30, 2005 Michigan
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    Of poetry I am not a fan,
    and I still ain't.
     
  7. rronin

    rronin Initiate (0) Jul 4, 2005 Washington

    It's very much of it's era. It ain't great poetry but it spoke to me (I coulld picture a Victorian gent, puffing on a stogie while sipping a cold one) and I liked it!
     
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  8. smbslt

    smbslt Pooh-Bah (1,980) Dec 26, 2010 Illinois
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    Yikes! I reacted.
    Of poetry I know not.
    This is not helping.
     
  9. zid

    zid Grand Pooh-Bah (3,132) Feb 15, 2010 New York
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  10. Shanex

    Shanex Grand Pooh-Bah (4,960) Dec 10, 2015 France
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    Curiously, I like words, rhymes and puns but poetry has never done it for me.

    Cheers.
     
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  11. TheIPAHunter

    TheIPAHunter Grand High Pooh-Bah (6,026) Aug 12, 2007 California
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    Thank you. It wasn't meant to be anything greater.
     
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  12. Troutbeerbum

    Troutbeerbum Initiate (0) Dec 5, 2016 Maine

    While we’re on poetry, I want to segway into literature a little.... I’m a huge Steinbeck fan, Cannery Row being my favorite book. This poem brings to mind a Mac, Eddie, and the rest of the boys at the Palace Flophouse.
     
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  13. Lahey

    Lahey Initiate (0) Nov 12, 2016 Michigan

    It lost me for a bit, but the last few lines were kinda dope. Good on them for mentioning nut brown ale in the poem!
     
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  14. dcotom

    dcotom Grand High Pooh-Bah (6,637) Aug 4, 2014 Iowa
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    I like it. Expressing such deep thoughts with a few well-chosen words is a true art form. As far as the construction goes, it reminds me a great deal of the hymn "Love Unknown." It flows smoothly despite the terse phrasing. Besides, it describes perfectly what I am doing right now. (Except for the cigar.)

    De gustibus and all that.
     
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  15. Troutbeerbum

    Troutbeerbum Initiate (0) Dec 5, 2016 Maine

    Segue, not Segway.
     
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  16. SammyJaxxxx

    SammyJaxxxx Initiate (0) Feb 23, 2012 New Jersey

    That was so bad, it hurt my soul when I read it.
     
  17. BBThunderbolt

    BBThunderbolt Grand High Pooh-Bah (7,846) Sep 24, 2007 Kiribati
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    I thought one was required to relinquish ones soul when one accepts a position in your field? :wink:


    Poims versus haiku is
    An interesting type of
    Comparison of chat
     
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  18. cavedave

    cavedave Grand Pooh-Bah (4,157) Mar 12, 2009 New York
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    I don't claim the skill of a Poe or a Thackeray
    But I can tell you for certain that poem was hackery.
     
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  19. Ahonky

    Ahonky Initiate (0) Feb 13, 2018 New York

    I actually found that to be a well constructed poem.
     
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